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Cover. ?4Y reedlleqtion still remains that the Bikini people wentd the w*M mliation in the title tQ stand out by wing smaller type for the remaln(ter. Aa it la, thti does not. acccxaplieh their wishes. have auord for it, why dufine it? it fair to may that thOS@ oel~s ‘... Join together to make Up *@h part . ..* of the blood. Another remaon to eliminate the marrou definition. We talked a bit about the order of words. 1 would pre!’er tQ put thtm in the order in uhioh they oocur. As it standt), the definition or the UQrd alpha, fQr example, includes the word ‘energya mod this la hot explained until wa reach radiation. IM.r$oduetiorr - next to laat parag. The purpose of this ploturea and aany or th~ uorda ars the samo&ain the Rwetak booklut, thwa hwo been changes t~, hopafully, ohrify some of the lnforrnatlon. Ir Utla la not inoluded, 1 aea no purpose to leaving the aentenoe as it plaoe to lntrodu~ hdlne. For Lhe others, U@were carerul to introduce tham by name and, thsrr, dmacribe the
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tlerk,we Put it 10 bercwe even lntroductn.s ~hat they have nams. If you leave lt in, it akuld be treat~ h the same ~mter as the others. However, note that it is adequately treated on page 17, parag. 36. If YOLI M& it out, note tkt the Cigura on top cd’ pp. 5 wet be Ohanged. The last arrow in the figme on the bott~’ of pa$cn 4 end 5 stmuld k reuwed. There ia no symbol *rter the one with 4 wiggly liaea. Shouldn~t the symbol on the dan have a label such u win PP. 9. I would p~ar~e that the notntion tbt islaads were destroyed be In the legend with the islands shown
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. p18.ama7 What will the people think of this? I wuld eliminate blood from the list. PP- 17, rlgure, ITM oaptlon ‘aanoer oan occur like a cancers and may be qisleading. Could ur add ‘in some typm of canemr, however, no nuellhg OOOUrSn. implies “Oot all”. Am there groups of people that do not have naturti auL9blons7 The last two aentenc~a could be queatloned on thQQrOLiCal IV’Ouoda beeauae we have not specified the amQunt, or fadL3t,ion. Should this be related to the radlat,ion reoeivwl at Bikini? The wrding or the last sentence could be chnnged b aomethlng like: “Scientists oannot deteot a mall incrtaae”. The present wording pp. 19. The last paragraph Eivw the Lmpeeaslon that if they stay helw Lhe sLnndard no harm will occur. Thus, in the nent.enoe starting on the 7th line, ‘TCI proteot It would be bettmr M state that aolentlsts believu that follow ‘infcw==tlon” and aet off with oomas. In parag. 35 do we uanL to lndloat.e the possible returm to their atoll? I thought that U@ had ohanged pp. 21 et d. I trust that the nuabees t’or oanoers are not the real ones. For ar-pie, doubling the oancor in the next 30 yearn on- aeema soneubat high. PP. 29. Shouldn’t thmre be a oaptlon for tho figure. it WE possible ror ttm’e to be no dmger~7 Didn’t they say that there w no d-ger?
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m. last pamgmph 8buld be changed to Perlect that there are now two aeta of maps.
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